A day in July. It's a cloudy day.

    Mr. Mouse is in South Africe. Mr. Mouse gives the letter to his friend, Miss South, a mouse in South Africa. She give Mr. Mouse a purple toy hippo in that country. Mrs Mouse has two earrings.

    Now, they are at the zoo. Look at there! Mr. Mouse and Mrs South are sitting on the neck of a tall giraffe!

    "This is fun, isn't it?" says Mrs South. I think she is very exciting.

    But Mr. Mouse is very scared. He says: "No! This is scary!" Look! Mr. Mouse's four coins drop from his pocket. And his hat is flying into the sky.

    What's the giraffe doing? He is drinking water. A hippo and a lion are looking at them.

    In the evening, Mr. Mouse calls his wife.

    "Guess what!"

    "What?" says Mrs. Mouse.

    "A giraffe is taller than a kangaroo."

    "Wow! Take a picture!" Mrs. Mouse says, "Where are you going tomorrow? "

    No one tells. Maybe he want to go to London. Have fun, Mr. Mouse! -- 教师评语：精彩结尾！

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教师评语：这是一篇用心的习作．教师要求不少于１５句话的描述，而李筱睿同学写了很长的一篇练笔，而且语法和拼写的错误不是很多．可见她是一个用心的好孩子！

文章对课文中图片的细节部分描述得非常详细，用了不同的句型去表达小作者的感受和体验．值得大家好好阅读．

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